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NaNo updates, Jim Roy Howard's, test readers wanted
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I have updated Entry 10, new ending, temporarily removed Jidurr the Bounty Hunter finding and reporting Jim to bounty seeker MooseChangerPat
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I think I need to relocate the Kazach flashback
MooseChangerPat
interesting
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which reminds me, mind if I throw Dad a link?
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The end of chapter 10 was clunky. Instead of JIm going off alone, Marigold will now accompany him and ask him questions about the past
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Intentions: fill in details, Rhuk, Doisgell/Zchnik war.
-Marigold insults hamster aliens
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Yes please, I would be honored if he read it
MooseChangerPat
pfft
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I like it
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I'll ask him about it then
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many thanks!
MooseChangerPat
how big are your hamster aliens?
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like, hamsters.
MooseChangerPat
so normal sized
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Jim goes to meet them up at their freighter to exchange goods for his diner, but Marigold is swooned by them because they look like hamsters
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pfffft
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poor Mari
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she creates an incident because she picks up the captain and smashes his honor, in other words cooing and petting
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"OH MY GOD THEY'RE HAMSTERS."
"How dare you, I am rubs little face with little paws in agitation not a 'hamster', I am wiggles little whiskers in fury the captain of this here vessel!"
"OH MY GOD THEY WEAR THEIR BABBLEDOTS LIKE LITTLE HATS"
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Pumpqueen Fall how far did you get? (Im not trying to bug you I was wondering if this change affects you)
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So cute
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It doesn't yet sorry
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no that's good
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the 'ends' of this rope are still frayed and need tightening
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so it is kind of good you are behind, so you get the real deal by the time you catch up
MooseChangerPat
good shit
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/o/
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Captcha Check New chapter/entry is up
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Behold the Criketeans in all their squeaky insultedness
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"You are lucky Creet is only Criketean merchant marine. If they had any sort of sway in their parliament we would have had a legitimate declaration of war."

"God, can you imagine, a declaration of war by HAMSTERS," her face was rosy.
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this may be one of my most favorite things I have ever said
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Lmfao I love her
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Why am I making out Rhuk the hardest character to create, why do i do dis
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BECAUSE YOU LOVE
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Huh?
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Captcha Check Today's update
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This time we see a little bit into Rhuk, Marigold unintentionally seduces a Bladdagor, and the introduction of Dunyegarze the antagonist
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but kyle, isnt Rhuk the-
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shut up I am Kubo-ing the hell out of this as I go
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oooohhh
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Okay we're back on the groove. Marigold comes face to face with Rhuk in a closed room.
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/o/
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Shaking, she watched as the four sets of claws gripping the doorframe hauled the monstrosity from the hallway into the small room, seemingly folding itself from the tight doorway it barely fit in into the space she sorely wish it didn't. With it's scaled body through, four legs followed behind, clicking on the tiled floor with a deep, dagger-like ring
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Maybe someday I'll try and write some horror...
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I love writing. It is legal torture
MooseChangerPat
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It's official: Marigold eats mint chocolate chip ice cream with peanut butter and guzzles tea to deal with the shit she is living through
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same
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To
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Both writing and yanno
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OBVIOUSLY THE ICE CREAM AND PEANUTBUTTER AND TEA GUZZLING /chugs
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I have not had mint chip ice cream with peanutbutter ALL MONTH BABE
Whatson
holy cow, how are you coping without it?
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But I have been eating chocoalte covered pretzels so it's not like I'm eating healthy or something
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roflmao
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TEA
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T E A
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Captcha Check In this addition, Marigold tries her best not to pee her pants
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oh no
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have you read any more? : D
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I'm sorry
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