Next one is a personal fix - I adjusted Ran's position to make her face closer to Yukina just like the MV. - Redrawn Ran's face, fixed the highlights , added right thigh, added some shading - Added a bit more shading to Yukina using the MV as reference. - Changed the BG entirely, made it closer to the MV.
I'm no expert in composition, as I'm learning myself.. but that's where I'm focusing on the critique/fixes and conveying more of the energy between the two.
easy fix: -hmm... tried cropping it too. it just didn't feel okay for me cropping out their outstretched hands like that. personal fix: -you absolute madman! the redraw on ran's face and hair and repositioning her was great! -the addition of her right thigh kinda gave her the impression that she's leaning forward~ sweet!~ 8D
-nice job on the shading on both of them. it looks more dynamic now. (kinda like seeing it from a lower angle just like in the MV) -nice job on the penlights! and were the colored flames done using a special brush?
-daaang~ you're getting really good at compositions~ thanks for doing critique on this!~ your composition really brought their clash at the center of the pic.
- I guess when you worked on the whole pic it feels like a waste to crop === - Since the MV showed them from a low angle I had to adjust Ran's head (and head size which I forgot to mention) to it look more dynamic - Looks like body gesture is quite important in expression
- Yeah I downloaded a smoke brush from CSP Asset store. As for the penlights I google'd a multi colored dot image and used it as penlights then blurred it xD - You're welcome and thanks for the complement! I want to get good
- === -ah, i didn't notice that until you mentioned it. good point there. -yeah. :3 -ah! i knew it. xD and haha! good trick there on the penlights! xD -
red x violet! bang dream's yukina x ran!
tried doing two characters this time around~xDThat's a startyep!and once again, requesting critique.
ah, sure~ go ahead please~ :3
- Simply cropping the pic to primarily focus on the two felt it gave more tension than the original pic.
- I adjusted Ran's position to make her face closer to Yukina just like the MV.
- Redrawn Ran's face, fixed the highlights , added right thigh, added some shading
- Added a bit more shading to Yukina using the MV as reference.
- Changed the BG entirely, made it closer to the MV.
-hmm... tried cropping it too. it just didn't feel okay for me cropping out their outstretched hands like that.
personal fix:
-you absolute madman! the redraw on ran's face and hair and repositioning her was great!
-the addition of her right thigh kinda gave her the impression that she's leaning forward~ sweet!~ 8D
-nice job on the penlights!
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- Since the MV showed them from a low angle I had to adjust Ran's head (and head size which I forgot to mention) to it look more dynamic
- Looks like body gesture is quite important in expression
- You're welcome and thanks for the complement! I want to get good
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-ah, i didn't notice that until you mentioned it. good point there.
-yeah. :3
-ah! i knew it. xD
and haha! good trick there on the penlights! xD
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