Quinneapolis
what would a good wonder egg priority look like
Quinneapolis
keep most of the pilot and initial hook
Quinneapolis
Ai has a friend who committed suicide
Quinneapolis
she finds the accas and egg zone
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they say that if she protects enough egg people, her friend will come back to life
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the other girls join in, each trying to revive a different person
Quinneapolis
where should that plot go from there if it wasn't written by an asshole
Quinneapolis
does it become about moving past loss and grieving, with the girls finding meaning in life through each other while accepting that the people they lost are gone
Quinneapolis
was Ai's friend in fact super murdered by creepy teacherman
Quinneapolis
who's the main antagonist here? The teacher? the accas?
Quinneapolis
what if they're connected somehow
𝗕𝘂𝗻𝗻𝘆 𝗩𝗮𝗹𝗲𝗻𝘁𝗶𝗻𝗲
don't mind me sat here with popcorn
Dragons Dragons
everything goes as it did until the finale, where Sawaki gives his sob story speech and Ai almost believes it, but something is off
she's about to give up when some distortion clues her in that yes, Koito didn't kill herself... because Sawaki killed her and covered it up (which makes more sense)
Quinneapolis
there's things i'd change before then
Quinneapolis
like how egg priority wonderland is created by an evil robot hacking teenage girls into committing suicide because their womanly emotions make them easier to suicide
Dragons Dragons
Neiru isn't an AI copy and let's get rid of the eugenics thing too, her sister was really her sister and just broke from the pressure to be perfect because their family is now just mundane but still powerful and strict
Quinneapolis
as opposed to boys and their pragmatic goal-oriented suicides
Quinneapolis
I like Frill but she needs a lot of tweaking
Dragons Dragons
and yeah, Frill is a scapegoat, the Accas are to blame
Quinneapolis
for her storyline to not be a disaster
Snowdrops ミ☆
the accas are somehow sacrificing the girls using the possible revivals of their loved ones as bait to resurrect Frill?
Quinneapolis
I actually kind of dig the idea that Frill isn't locked in a coffin, she's just physically completely dead
Quinneapolis
and exists only as a ghost in the machine
Quinneapolis
which the Accas are using the egg system somehow to try and pull back out
Quinneapolis
despite being the ones who destroyed her in the first place
Quinneapolis
could tie into the grief theme
Dragons Dragons
The thing is they never cared about Frill, the second she had emotions, she had to go.
Snowdrops ミ☆
maybe using the girls is a test run to see if they can actually hack death but there's those pesky monsters fueled by bad emotions
Quinneapolis
Ura-Acca knows that what he did was fucked but instead of atoning he wants to undo it
Quinneapolis
no need for self-reflection if you just fix the problem instead
Snowdrops ミ☆
of which frill has EX BOSS level monsters because there are a lot of bad feels about her dads killing her
Quinneapolis
what if you need a genuine connection to the person who died in order to enter the egg world
Quinneapolis
and the accas are using these teens because they don't
Quinneapolis
they didn't actually care about Frill
Snowdrops ミ☆
oh that works
Quinneapolis
so it won't let them in
Dragons Dragons
that works great
Princess Emily
a good WEP is run in Valor because we love using Value to fix stories,,,
Quinneapolis
oh oh oh
Quinneapolis
the Accas give the whole speech about girls' suicides vs boys' suicides to explain why the egg kids are always female
Quinneapolis
but the actual reason is that
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they're guiding the egg warriors towards targets that resemble Frill
Quinneapolis
I can't decide if it's actually possible to revive people or not
Quinneapolis
I'm leaning no
Quinneapolis
the egg world was discovered before Frill died, either she connected to it on her own or she was created in order to do so
Quinneapolis
but then something freaks out one of the Accas and he destroys Frill in anger
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and the Accas are now telling the protags and also each other that they're in this to save Frill
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when it's really about their lost work
Quinneapolis
uncovering the secrets of life and death
Quinneapolis
hey, shinji nojima? this took 20 minutes
Quinneapolis
(I jest, but also Nojima absolutely is just a shitty hack writer)
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