Short story: Foreshadowing
this is what I spent all day working on
gingersnap
gingersnap
(which it's only like 2 min and if you tell me what you think I can milk another 100 words out of this response!)
Nika
ha, neat! And that IS weird foreshadowing. XD
EsperBot
Typo in the title card
gingersnap
oh hell
EsperBot
Dropped the e in Foreshadowing
gingersnap
yeah. Oh well. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
gingersnap
thanks for pointing it out to me though
EsperBot
Also I think it might have been a bit better if you'd said that you'd picked out the song (without talking about the lyrics), then told the story, then went back to explain the foreshadowing.
EsperBot
That way, you're foreshadowing in your video about foreshadowing. Foreception.
EsperBot
It's good that you actually pulled the photo from the DoT twitter feed, that gave it a good sense of yes-this-actually-happened
EsperBot
Oh and a little audio mixing thing; on the last line, you faded yourself out a bit too fast, so you wound up getting a little cut off.
gingersnap
how do you mean, like, 'I picked a song, went for a run, then car crash, then I realized about the words'?
EsperBot
Like, when you're telling the story, mention that you went for a run and what song you picked out
gingersnap
yeah that last bit is WMM and me running out of fucks to give about this assignment that was due a month ago lol
EsperBot
but don't go into the lyrics or their foreshadow value just yet
EsperBot
Then tell about the car crash
gingersnap
hmm but that seems to give it away if you know the song and then the rest of it would be 'don't explain the joke' for the people who had heard it?
EsperBot
then go back and give us the song lyrics
EsperBot
Fair enough.
EsperBot
I think you may have wanted to at least mention the run and the music ahead of time? THat way you don't have to introduce those elements of the story right at the end.
gingersnap
yeah, that's a good point
EsperBot
Also haha yeah I totally feel you on 'out of fucks to give'
gingersnap
it's a week til summer and I have 9 weeks of Access assignments to do ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
gingersnap
this assignment is a month late because I had a concussion and computer troubles /¯\_(ツ)_/¯ intensifies
gingersnap
but this is all good feedback though, thank you!!